martes, 23 de octubre de 2012


THANKSGIVING DAY.

In 1620 The Pilgrims sailed from England on a ship, they crossed the Atlantic Ocean. The trip lasted 66 days. This journey was very difficult , because two passengers an a crewman died, it was sad, also a baby boy was born on the voyage, he was named Oceanus.
After that, The Pilgrims arrived in North America, as a result, they started a new town calles Plymouth. The first winter was very hard , the weather was cold there was very little food. Then The Natives helped The Pilgrims grow crops. What’s more, the harvest was great ¡¡
Finally, The Pilgrims and The Natives celebrated together with a feast, there was turkey, bread from corn, boiled pumpkin, wild ducks and fish.

1 comentario:

  1. Hi Romina =D

    Your work is perfect in vocabulary and perfect in structure, but it has problems with punctuation and spelling. Remember that sentences are SEPARATED by PERIODS; not by commas. Please, check them out and CORRECT THEM, please ;) :

    1. In 1620 the Pilgrims sailed from England on a ship. they crossed the Atlantic Ocean.
    2. ...because two passengers an a crewman died. It was sad. Also, a baby boy was born on the voyage. He was named Oceanus.
    3. After that, the Pilgrims arrived in North America. As a result, they started a new town calleD, Plymouth.
    4. The first winter was very hard: the weather was cold AND there was very little food.
    5. ...the harvest was great !!
    6. ...the Pilgrims and the Natives celebrated together with a feast. There was turkey...

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